Remembering You!

Emne: Remembering You! Lør Dec 13, 2008 9:25 pm

Her er min første S/A
Jeg har lavet den til min bedste veninde fra Holland! Deb.
Tænkte bare lige at jeg ville ligge den her ind.
Giv endelig nogen feedback, skrive hvad i synes.
hvad skal gøres bedre, osv.

Jeg fik ideen fra; Remembering Sunday - All Time Low.

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Remembering You!

The life of a lover.
A man who loves a woman so deeply, that even his own heart can't beat anymore.
Is a man that have lost his life, love and his soul to the opposite sex.
She couldn't only take advantage of him, but she also would do it.
She would creep into his dreams at night, and turn it into a nightmare, where she's the princess that have to be saved.

Dougie shut his eyes open feeling his sweaty body under the hot duvet.
He had dreamt about her, again.
He dragged himself out of bed, he quickly got a pair of jeans and a plain shirt on.
The clock on his bedside table had just hit 2 am,
his head was spinning, every evening for the past five days he had been out, clubbing, drinking, dancing.
He hadn't been sober for days.
He allowed himself over to the frontdoor and pulled it open,
feeling the cold breeze hit his sweaty body.
He pulls over his coat and leav the house.
Remembering sunday he felt to his knees.
They had breakfast together, but two eggs don't last like the feeling he needs.
As he looks up from the ground, this place lookes familiar to him.
The tap on his shoulder, got harder and as he went up to his feet, he saw her big brown hazel eyes.
She reaches out and pulls on his hand with a devilish grin,
her tanned skin, her straight white teeth was so unreal, she was a fairytail, his fairytail.
She let him in, she let him up stairs, she left him dying, to get in.

Dougie reaches out his hands, but no one hears him,
he's calling trying to find her.
He'll be calling tonight again.
He didn't wanna bother anyone, but he needed to ask this question
"Have you seen this girl?"
he'll show a picture and hope for the best.
"She's been running through my dreams, and it's driving me crazy it seems"
Danny had told him, at least hundred times that,
"She'll come mate, don't worry!"Danny knew Dougie's pain.
He'd been though them same, but he got his girl.
would Dougie ever get that?
"I'm going to ask her to marry me!"Dougie said, shattering his eyes back to Dannys.

Dougie finally found her adress, though she didn't believe in love,
he's determined to call her bluff,
he or she couldn't deny these butterflies that only would grow.
These butterflies are filling his head, making him sure, she's the one.
The knock on the big brown door,
the neighbors unfamiliar faces, they are talking about his tries,
but this is the night, the only night, now he's dying to get inside,
but the door remains shut.

Dougie wouldn't give up, he keept coming every night, but the door never once opend.
He started to get eager he wanted her so bad.
He knocked on every door on her street, getting the same answer out of them.
The neighbors said "She moved away"
It was funny how it had rained all day,
he didn't share it much of a thought then, but it seemed to make more sence now.
That all the clouds were fallowing his desperate endeavor, to find his girl.
Where ever she may be now.

Dougie didn't care anymore, he wouldn't believe her neighbors, he broke into her house that night.
The house was big and fancy, filled up with joy, warm and one of the most beautiful houses he had ever seen,
just like she was, the most beautiful girl, she was so stunning, simply gorgeous.
He remembered her brown eyes, her body, her shape, her hair,
he wanted to touch her again, he was hungry after her, she was all he wanted, all he needed.
Dougie walked dripping weet into the kitchen, a note was glued onto the table.

"I'm not coming back. I've done something terrible. I'm terrified to speak the truth, you'd expect that from me. I'm mixed up, I'm blunt. Now the rain is washing you out of my hair, and hopefully out of my mind. keeping an eye on the world. So many thousand feet on the ground.
I'm over you now, I'm not home in the clouds.
Showing you out of my hair."

Dougie looked at her nervous writing, the note was wet from her tears.
Did she feel the same? why leave then?
He fold it into his pocket whispering.
"I guess I'll go home now. I guess I'll go home!"
A tear got mixed with the rain as he dragged his hurt and tried body though the rain, back to Danny's place.

Danny got Ditte.
Tom got Jess.
Harry got Fiona.
The princes got their princesses.

What about...
Dougie Lee Poynter and Deborah Abigail Fortuin, will they every get combined, again?
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Synes I?
alt er velkommen ;D

Var lidt nervøs for at lægge den ud! Er der nogen grund til det?

Emne: Sv: Remembering You! Lør Dec 13, 2008 9:35 pm

Du ved allerede jeg synes den er super god (: Den er både sørgelig og smuk. & Jeg ved du får det her at vide ret ofte; men du skriver altså virkelig godt! Very Happy

Bliv endelig ved, du kan roligt lave flere af den slags.

Emne: Sv: Remembering You! Søn Dec 14, 2008 1:26 am

det var rigtig godt!

det eneste som var lidt irriterende var, at jeg sad og sang sangen inde i hovedet da jeg læste teksterne som er i din fic. xD men det er jo mit eget problem - intet negativt om din fic Very Happy

det er rigtig godt.

- og hollændere er åbenbart pisse søde! xD
har nemlig også selv en rigtig god veninde derfra Very Happy

Emne: Sv: Remembering You! Søn Dec 14, 2008 1:29 am

SSOFIEE skrev:: det var rigtig godt!

det eneste som var lidt irriterende var, at jeg sad og sang sangen inde i hovedet da jeg læste teksterne som er i din fic. xD men det er jo mit eget problem - intet negativt om din fic

det er rigtig godt.

- og hollændere er åbenbart pisse søde! xD
har nemlig også selv en rigtig god veninde derfra

Jaa, xD
Alle har deres mening!

Jaa det er de bare! men de er jo ikke så meget anderledes end os dansker.

Emne: Sv: Remembering You! Søn Dec 14, 2008 10:02 am

Hold da .. wauw Razz

Ditte du har gjort det igen; det er rigtig smukt .
Og Ja, som Sarah sagde, du får nok hele tidet at vide at du skriver godt, men det gør du altså også!! Very Happy

Ingen grund til at være nernøs for noget som helst. Smile

Emne: Sv: Remembering You! Søn Dec 14, 2008 6:08 pm

Den er super fed xD hehe.. Dyster, men fuck jeg elsker det (;

Emne: Sv: Remembering You! Søn Dec 14, 2008 7:47 pm

Den er rigtig god Very Happy

som jeg også har sagt før hehe